i like the way u structured this poem great work! xox fallen

I like your work alot Pleaes write more.

Leona

amazing work! the structure is great and the repeated lines worked well with the poem. sometimes when people repeat a line in a poem it doesn't work out too good but you did it beautifully. it's filled with such saddness and the fact that she tried to hold onto the hope that was keeping her alive but soon it faded. Wonderful job. love the poem! keep up the wonderful writing!

~Jacklyn

Woot! i really liked this poem
it was so cool that it had that structure to it, very unique and creative
good job!
5/5

I can relate to that so much right now, just last night my mom was all like "everything will be O K" awsome write! 5/5

Very nice...well...I don't hev much time...I can only tell u ur poems r all great...so sorry...I might not leave comment on each one of them...just thought I tell u they were great...

Thanx for the comment on my poem! Wow this poem is excellent. I can totally relate. Keep up the good work. 5/5 You're in my favs!
-Sami

Wow i love this poem it was very well written and structured i love the emotion
5/5