That was very good. keep up the great work.

good poem but didn't really get any flow up while reading it.

Best wishes,
Patrik

Good poem but I agree with patrik it would be better with some flow!
The idea was good and i didn think the caracter would kill themselve so that was cool..

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oh my god, that is so dark and...emotional...

Fair poem, doesn't seem to flow but the concept is a nice one.
It seems to be the same kind of idea as the Amityville Horror. Kim x