Ash, this was a sad poem, but another great one, keep up the good work. I'm glad you're back.

Great job and detail. peace

Beautiful poem. keep it up!
-xXx-

Hey this is great... so sad i know exactly what you mean... last two lines really got me.
take care x x x

:( it's not good to only remember the sadness.... sadness only creates more sadness, happyness make Sadness hurt less

Thats sad..I hope everythings ok!..Your an awesome writter!

Wow! Amazing! Lots of emotion in it! 5!

Very good work. This is very sad too. I loved this stanza the most:
"I thought you save me from myself
I though you understood
But the fact still remain
That everything is gone"

Very powerful statement. Great work!

Much Love
~*hAiLy*~

"My heart feels nothing no more" mabey instead of no more you could say anymore. "I only ever wanted was for" i did not get that line. "I don’t even have my self no more" agai you may want to consider substituting no more with anymore I did not get this poem at all but i do think you tryed, mabey a little to hard i gave it a 3/5

Hey it's ok..... I felt alot of emotion and i could tell how you were feeling in the poem. Another good piece :)

That's a really sad poem. Cheer up, things aren't always this bad. Remember, no one is ever alone.

Good poem :)

Wasn't sure it would happen, but things got more intense this time. Great poem, I can see you either really thought this through or you were really really upset when you wrote this

Heartfelt,.. i noticed a lot of punctuation error,.. ill only list one thing.. usually people dont take heed to such superficial criticism ne way.. so the line below isnt really a sentence,.. true some people may say it like this.. the words 'was for' do not really need to be there.

I only ever wanted was for
Some one like you to care,

overall, this is a decent piece,.. no consistent rhyming scheme, and even the flow was a lil chaotic. nothing a revision couldnt fix, if you so choose.. 4/5.. pZ :)

Deep poem sad.
but still a great poem
keep up the good work

Jacs
xxx

The flow was broken in the middle, not bad, i liked it, it was captivating. 4/5

Very good poem i feel exactly like that..and thanks 4 commentin on my poems glad sumbody can relate...good work