That's terribly sad...losing a friend can be so rough...I hope you don't really feel that way, but well done with the poem...great form and emotion...

xxx

Great poem kinda sad but i liked it 5/5

Alot of emotion was put in to this, which makes it of course enjoyable to read. The only thing i didnt like was how you kept using "you, true, too" those kind of words in your rhyme scheme.

Very good! I know how this feels, believe me, but whatever! to hell with all of them! newayz it was great, the flow was awesome, and the rhyming was very original, 5/5

Is this about me? lol

Okay um first thing this isnt relevent really but on mine you said something about the swear word...was it because it disrupted the flow? because you use swears sooo....?

anyways sometimes the rhyme seemed choppy, at time inconsistent

the 2nd stanza
Theres a war between us
and it hurts me to say
It's forgetting each other
that will be the only way.

i know this probably isnt what you want it to mean but i was thinking and i think it sounds a lot better if were to be

Theres a war between us
and it hurts me to say
Is forgetting each other
Going to be the only way?

thats just me though lol

feelings are great things good or bad so interesting dont you agree? good job writing what you feel is sometimes tough and you seem to have done it with ease or at least it appears that way good job

Very good poem i like the way you write 5/5

Nice poem, reminded me so much of my friendship and how much it is slowly dying right before my very eyes.

My favourite lines were:

"I want this to go away
I can't stand what's going on
I am crumbling under pressure
I can't go living on...."

5/5

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(")-(") Arrivederci!

Deep, very deep. I liked the air of indecision. very nice, that.
You seemed to not give very much description, which leaves a lot to the imagination, which is nice.

Good Writing!
beth

This was good as well great flow rhymes seemed effortless

screaming inside
your beating me down
so I pray, go away
beating me into the ground.

that my favorite stanza it reminded me of a korn song lol

very good job 5/5