Awesome job. The structure was good, and the poem had a nice flow from line to line, and verse to verse. It did jump around, but it made sense. Keep it up ;)

Great use of words and rhyming. godo job, it was really well done!

Nice. I like the flow of this poem and the way you worded things. Beautiful work. (I LOVED this line!: "time will teach wings don't break, but bend.
Hearts can be broken but time helps them mend"

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Very nice... Bravo!

LE MARQUIS

Very deep and meaningful! Terrific job!

-Taylor

So beautifully written...your word choice/phrasing is wonderful...and the words seem to be filled with wisdom and experience...fantastic!

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