Comments : The Death of the Valiant (somewhat unfinished)

  • 18 years ago

    by brittany

    Wow thats great. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    This was pretty strong thru and thru,.. the quality seemingly going up and down in the middle, and then at the end,.. i dont get what the music is.. it's somewhat unfinished, so i might attribute it to this,.. but im not sure, might be something i failed to perceive.. sad story of being alone, but with much resolve at the end.. i wonder if you really experienced this, is it from pure imagination, or a mixture of both.. truly a great read, as with all your others.. strong elements are teeming within this piece, and you captured them so vividly.. honest 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Amanda Bee

    Terrific job, Rasmus. This has such a sad feeling the whole way through. My favorite part was : "Cold and wet, I huddle, and wait
    for the coming peace, my final fate.
    Bound to die in the empty street,
    I try to cry, but lack strength to weep..."
    Great job:)

  • 18 years ago

    by M MEM

    This is a really amazing poem, good job 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by JJ

    I've read some of your other poems and this one is my favorite out of all, from begining to end. Outstanding job...keep up the good work! I'll be around to read more. take care

  • 18 years ago

    by Hurtingsoul

    This was a amazing poem i really like the last stanza and i loved how you put an amotsphere to the setting great poe
    take care
    HS