Its good one amber... but you can kinda build on it ... make it a little more longer if need be & a little more intense... i like the concept though.. hey if possible pls check out my poem "murder or suicide" ; )

Very short but sweet, a true love poem....This poem said it all and it made me think about my boyfriend!!! WELL DONE....

*much Love Sabrina*

Amazing that is the one i was looking for. Amazing job i loved this poem alot. It's so short but it gets to the point of what you are writing. Also it came from the heart which is great. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

CUTE POEM
5/5

Short and sweet but seems more like feelings and thoughs just jotted down. Maybe find more of a structure :)