Your attention to minor details really makes your poetry brilliant. Like mentioning the untied shoelaces, very nicely done! This flows very well and just screams with beautiful imagery! Well done~Holly

Wow. just wow, i dont think you could have made the imagery any better. Excellent! I'm known for my critique, but there just isnt anything wrong with this in any way.

It's a good poem, but the lines are a little loose. 4/5