Nice poem. I really enjoyed it. It flowed nicely and it gave me a sense of romance and longing. Great job:)

Very good, I like it quite a bit, how i long for the holidays as well

Love You

Sadness enclosing like a tomb
that's neat and it's very descriptive, nice!
to hide my desire.....you.
might wanna change that to
to hide my desire.....
you.
I think it would improve it to put you on the next line, very captivating, 4/5 the structure and flow needs work.