Pretty good, but doesn't blend to well, and you cut the sentances in half which is distracting, but the format was good and the subject was clear. not bad, 3/5

There was a deep quality about it, an unsubtle fear, and anxiousness and a calm that was rather entrancing to read.
It sounded plain at first, and lacked that poetic richness, but it seemed to have a layer on it, as though it was covered by a cape of indifference, that was hiding all the emotion underneath.

The words weren't that beautiful, but when you thought about it, the meaning was.

-beth

Yeah its tough being a parent at 16 but the thing is I dont even get to see him. so yeah nice poem

nick

That was deep wow i loved it.....it was dark n sad powerful to...