If it's a true story... I'm so sorry! It's so sad... Well this poem is unique...
Keep it up! And I hope that this poem not about you... It's terrible to lose someone you love

I really like this poem as a whole, I think it has alot of good ideas. But I think you should work on the rhyme and flow and meter of the poem.
In the 1st stanza There is a rhyme, but its a little predictable an simple.
In the 2nd stanza's rhymes are there, and there, and they match the 1st, but they again are a little weak and barley there.
The 3rd stanza doesn't follow the same pattern you were going with the 1st and 2nd, and the rythym is a little of because of it.
The 3rd stanza again doesn't follow the pattern and it doesn't have a rhyme.
The 4th stanzas rhymes are okay, a little weak, but ok. when you said "what's sad is..." it makes it sound less like a poem, and more like a speech. and the last line doesn't fit the pattern. maybe if you combine the last two lines into one, and take out the what's sad is ( maybe something like "that much is true")
The 5th stanza is fine.
The 6th doesn't fit the pattern again. And trigger ans shivers doesn't rhyme.
The 7th is okay
and the 8th doesn't fit the pattern again.

Okay so good poem, hopefully you'll take some of my suggestions. good work

Whoa.thats a little extreme,but nonetheless it was good

Very well written, good job, definitely dark, keep it up

I imagine this really didn't happen since you are still here and not in jail...but then again do they have comps in jail ( HUMM ) Not really sure.Great job !

Wow is this true. i really hope not if so i am really sorry. amaizng job though. very deep and sad keep it up

Excellent job...even though the rhyme scheme was broken a bit...5/5

Sad and scary but a very good poem...i rly hope it isnt true cause that would be sad

I love the description, and what was happening was kind of obvious, which is ok...but i liked it alot. i love it actually! i was going to say "did this really happen?" lol but i doubt u actually kik ur bro...sorry im' slow sum times, i'm a blonde at heart lol neways, i really like ur peoms, they're really good.

Wow...this is so...just....FRIGGIN AMAZING!! as soon as i started reading it i was imediatly sucked into the story of the poem...very good...5/5

Blurry structure at times... try changing some of the lines: "I watch'd you hold that gun" (l. 4). But, nevertheless an impressive work of art. Very emotional, and passionate. Good job!

I really hope this didnt happen i would go through stanzas and point out problems but someone has already done that so you dont need it again i think the form was a little odd sometimes your messed up the rhyme scheme but other then that great poem if its true which i doubt because your not in jail, your a great story writer and thats a talent that you should hold dear...good job...4/5

WOW! That is so sad...... and it takes such a turn at the end. At first I thought it was the father. But then you get to the end and it is the brother. Excellent poem!

That was very good i loved the way you wrote it i like the way it had a twist at the end thought it might be her husband 5/5

Very well written. the flow was very good. it was full of emotion and feeling. 5/5 keep up the good work.

Hm, at times I feltl ike it got rocky . But still a great piece of work . You didn`t just come out and say who you killed, and so and so . I liked that . The periods made pauses -- which added to the effect . Liked it .
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