Hey i like ur poem its pretty good..

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Oh yeah your poem was amazing too!
5/5!

Well created imagery and description...I can imagine the whole thing...

Thank you for the comment :)

How have you been?

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Wow you really know alot about the topic, which you definatly showcased quite well

i had very few troubles while reading through i thought tiny words were needed here and there and they are as follows...merely suggestion thats all...

*fastening his pant legs
tightly knotting both shoes*

i think it would sound better as *tightly knotting both his shoes*

*hearing deaths outside the gates
as he sits on the floor*

i personally think saying as he sits upon the floor gives it more elegance even though its a very small change it adds the syllable i think the line lacks and i think it flows better but hey just my opinion

thats all....the second and third stanzas were my favorites absolutly amazing, your vocab is strong and your rhyming ability is brilliant...keep it up...

I love the character, and the way you describe and utilize him. A very nice piece.