Seems a little vague in spots, like you're just throwing stuff out, could jsut be me though, or maybe that's how you want it. Either way, I still like the ideas very much.

Wow, I liked this alot, your rhyming is very accurate and isn't forced, (I find forced rhyming so annoying!) and I also like the originality of this piece.

BEAUTIFUL ^_^

Your poems are soo good.
so far i think this is my favorite. the rhyming and everything was really good.

Amazing! its so sad and effective. 5/5

This was your best so far i think so inspiring i have like a million ideas to write about now thats so cool i loved this so much your gonna be on favorites your great

* Will Always Be Here To Listen *

(((((big hugs)))))

Michelle

I really like this poem, its very creative.good job5/5