Very touching....sometimes i felt a force of rhyming....member poems dont hav to rhyme all the time...and flow is very important....but you showed alot of emotion in this one....4/5 great job

Okay i know my comments arnt nice, but thats okay i hope you give me honesty as well even if you wanna tell me i suck.......

honestly....i didnt want to finesh reading it, and it being long wasn't the problem its just it was so hard to read you made childish points i love you is something beautiful when transformed into words that say it without being so blunt i love you is nothing in a poem i dont think unless you state it in another way its lost its touch and you tried rhyming but poems shouldnt rhyme unless they are consistent i know i have said that before but i think you should understand it.....

Its good but long so yeah like it but maybe think about separating it into two poems

Wow very long. it was really good except i had a hard time following...