Very good, but what was she so depressed about, or scared of? i'm confued. you should go into more detail of this poem. its a general poem of depression; originality does wonders for poetry

Excellent...5/5...I like how in the top section you were like explaining all the good parts of the relationship, and then the bottom part where it all went kinda hairy....Good tecnique ...I havent seen that before..Nice
Ash

Now breathing is a bigger task
Always thinking of the past

thats so thoughtful those line really have a ring to them that i definatly enjoyed

*I realize you make me whole*
i think this should go *I realize that you make me whole*

*and now i cant even speak*
i think flows a little better as *now I can't even seem to speak*

and on the last line maybe add a Two before afraid

other then small words here and there this was a great poem i did read through it multiple times and the simplicity, form, and rhyme scheme is wonderful

really good job....5/5

This is truly a wonderful piece. So powerful and emotive, and easy to relate. There are some typographical errors ("I") but that can be edited readily.

Aww all of your poems are so sad..omg i love all of them 5/5
Becky
xoxo

Thanks so much for the comment. I really appreciate it. As to your poem, it is wonderful. As Hans says, some typo errors, but they're easy to change. The emotion is easily felt. Also, you could add some apostrophes. Basically, your only problem is grammar, but that's really easy to change.

Mmk i don't know if i really liked this one like i liked your other one. I mean this is great but i think it was like he was trying to help you but then you just pulled back and walked away and you didn't want to deal with that and stuff. I mean i like this poem but not as much i guess. But you are a talented writer keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever. .Hun sorry if i was a little harsh but i'm not perfect either.

So very sad, I think I'm going to cry. I hope this isn't true. I really liked the ending line especially, it was a powerful ending.

Just one thing, you have it correct in the actual poem but in the title you have "to" when it should be "too."

Good job keep writing.

I thought it was very good i liked the way it was like two parts

I love it great job you have talent 5/5

I love it great job you have talent 5/5

I love it great job you have talent 5/5

Excellent poem, Would be great if you could make it longer

Stay strong hun...

Really nice poem, i enjoyed it. I was simple but there was alot of meaning within it.
xxx cici xxx

I really like this..i can relate so much..Well done.

I liked this one alot very well written 5/5

Wow, you really are really good.
I like it.
JJx

Nice job, keep up the good work i like this one alot, 5.5

It was a good poem that flowed..but entirely, and me, dont rhyme....but other than that is was pretty good.. cliche, but pretty good....