I don't know if you have done this on purpose, but ALL lines added up to 11 syllables, bar the last one. This gave a nice meter- and made the last line conciously stand out.
I really enjoyed the symbolism and wording you used- description was unique, and rhyming was not awkward. A very nice, beautifully dark, write!

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Hi Sarah I am very thankful that you took the time to read my poems this poem here has symbolism and you did a great job in putting it together and dont worry about the long comment i would much rather you tell me everything on your mind about my poem. I may post acouple more I dont know yet I hope to talk to you soon thanks and buh bye for now. oh I gave you a 5 for this too.

You should check out the other poem I have called Heaven's Light too :) if you could. Thanks

A very well written peace. Well structured with great description. A truly magnificent piece.

This is really amazeing. Its well writen. By the way I changed my other one. Take a look. Yours are really very good.

Amazing poem! 5/5

love mark xxx

Great job and thanks for the comments
on mine...take care

hugs, love, Ann

Great imagery with metaphorical properties. i loved it.

Wow. your poems are amazing. so different then everyone elses. i loved it.
fuking incredible.

Great poem, it was nice and short wonderfully writen, thank you very much for commenting on my poem 'How Does She Manage' and sure, you can send it out to people if you want.

I thought your poem lacked some emotion,it fell short with the descriptive language you need to work on that a little more other than that it was fine.