Comments : Say hello to heaven for me

  • 18 years ago

    by SweetSuicide

    LOve this one ..really made me think..but like i said to do wiht startin each sentence on thr left..but anyways you have some really good stuff..5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    Great poem...maybe add a little length, or maybe you'd rather keep it short i dont know

    uhh rhyming words like me and be and see won't get you anywhere they are convinent but anyone can do it try expanding the vocab

    great idea, very sweet poem

    4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jason Meres

    Love the idea, truly well done in that respect.

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashlee Nicole

    5/5 I like...It just still seems like this simple style just tends to leek out from you...Get Ubber creative, just one poem...Make so many metaphorical lines, that everyone who reads it...They relate to it...Because you're still getting your point out, but they relate to it by the way they read the metaphors..Ya know what I mean...I wanna see some metaphors dude! lol
    jk
    Thanks
    Ash

    ---Gosh I hope you don't hate my criticism..I try to be consrtuctive criticism...Not negative..Please don't take any of it the wrong way...----

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I really liked this one, very sweet indeed. I also liked the rhyming, it flowed well. Well done.

  • 18 years ago

    by Lonely Heart .ღ.

    Beautifully written, i enjoyed reading it ^_^

  • This almost made me cry
    thanks for all your comments
    this is beautiful!
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by NannO

    Aww.. that was so sweet, it got me in tears.. i reli lykd the idea of the poem, and the fact that it was a short poem, made it all the more sweeter.. i loved it and ur rhyme was in place
    keep it up
    take care

  • 15 years ago

    by munkee04

    It doesnt matter that you dont write your poems in stanzas, it is still very good!