Thought it was good they way you kinda split it up very good.

"To End Up What I Could Do."
I'm not entirely sure what you meant by this line. It seems like there are two different ideas in it, try reading it out loud and then rewriting it to clarify your meaning.

I think you could have expanded the symbolism within each of the parts of this poem, but even the thought of breaking the poem up into separate parts/roads of your life was well done. You should attempt to add more creative imagery, as there is plenty to explore along the roads of Darkness and Light.

It's a very rocky piece...like, it doesn't flow very well, but I do like the idea of the poem...

I like this poem, but it could use some rhyme. Other then that I liked the way you split the sections of life up.