Hell, thats um.... deep... but personally i found it quite enthralling, i like the idea that a person can be controlled by something so uncertain. Really nice piece, keep it up.
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Good job, THough I prefer if you would make stanzas. It would be easier to read. Keep it up

Woah.....woah! this is really dark haha (duh) i liked it it was freaky! 5/5

I loved that! You are AWSOME!