I really arore your writting, i wish i could write like this,

That was awesome i dont know what you mean you said you wish you had more disipline i think your great this was meaningful everything rhymes you were never off and it flowed so well there were absolutly no flow breaks at all good job 5/5

Wow this is really good....5/5...my favorite part and the party i feel flowed the ultimate best is

imperial halls or open plain
nothing will stop the blackened reign
darkened night loss of sight
feel the dead move tonight

an infant crying in the night
an infant crying for the light
whats the point of human life

i love the near repetition of the infant crying very dark 5/5

Wow... this poem was utterly amaznig. i found no little mistakes, but just the same fact that you should add commas in there to seperate different thoughts. thats about all; the rest of it nearly took my breath away. awesome job

It seemed like a complex maze of darkness, the type that makes u shiver slightly! I liked it.

Good Writing!
beth

I dont know exactly how to describe what this poem made me feel, it was like..idk...it was...creapy..n amazing all at the same time lol idk this was fabulious! i loved it 100%, if the numbers went higher then a 5 i would give u all the highest number i could! but since they dont, i'mma give u a 5/5 :)

This is also really good! 5/5 Loved it. It flows real good.
Becky
xoxo

You did an awesome job with this. It was very dark, yet very real. I love how you tie death and sleep together. My favorite line out of this peice is

"his darkness is beautiful to me"

It just caught my eye, and got me engaged into the poem. I also love how you end each stanza with a similar sentence flow, and the poem in itself was very easy to read.

Take Care,
Renee

I think this was the best of yours I have read so far. The flow was great. The rhyming did seem a little too predictable and average. But I did like this one alot more then the others. Keep up the good work. =) 5/5

`Taleee.