No mistakes here; it was a nice, short poem, and there is no critique needed. 5/5

The poem was short, dark, and almost angry. But I still think its a great poem.
Im not sure that its a mistake, but theres one verse that says "there screams" Im not sure if its supposed to be "their" screams or not. maybe just a matter of style.

Good Writing!
beth

This poem touches me in many ways. I can see the emotion that YOU have written, but for me, it means something else. :) lol neways, it was a great write, 5/5

This is really good...5/5
Becky
xoxo

This is a very strong emotional peice. It says a lot in very little words, and I think those are the best poems to read. It's somewhat confusing though, I'm not really sure what the idea is, is it just life? or is it a certain topic? Either way, it was well written and clever, the way you use your sentencing.

Take Care,
Renee

Really strong emotion in this. The rhyme was excellent. It flowed nicely. I don't really understand what you were trying to say though. But overall great job!

This was good aswell, Only thing though, Is maybe try and use a bit better grammer. I'm not too fussy on it, But.. Some people will rate your poems lower for it..

Otherthan that, I thought it was pretty good. I liked at the end how you asked why. Thought that gave it a great ending. Keep it up. 5/5

`Taleee.

Hmmm very heartfelt! well hope someday u will find the answers why? great job and keep it up