Damn.......very dark indeed. loving the description, its almost lyke watching a horror movie. i wish it could've been one long poem, however, you cut off at an awesome part. great job! XXXXX
JL

\\//\\//(())\\//\\//!!!! that was amazing..i was actually there...in your poem its soo realistic..i love it..the passion and emotion thats in there is beautiful...the only part i didnt like was the part whei love this poem..one of my faves from you!!!

-angel-
love ya hunni take it easy

Images were floating in my mind. i really understood this poem. reminds me of halloween :)

Thx alot everyone, i worked hard on this poem, thx for all ur awesum comments u guys r great!

Wow, you really did work hard on this piece (well, pieces, that is). It payed off. Refreshingly unique, dark, bravo!

Thank you :)

blusher
xxxx

I read both as you asekd at the beginning of this poem and wow... the description is amazing! I love it! My fav part amongst much more was:

"You see the bats fluttering through the cracked ceiling
And tiles of pentagrams litter the blood-stained floor.
Claws, fangs, scars and words try to tear you apart"

It's like whoa... the image you painted in my head is so clear and detailed!
Keep up the awesome writing! 5/5