I love it and I feel it very deep I have a friend who I feel just this way about keep up the good work 5/5

I liked this one alot, i really know this feeling. as for criticism i dont know how much i can give you it really is a great poem. um sometimes rhymes seemed forced because you had to murder a few sentences to get them to rhyme like this one

Instead to me your back you turn

im not against rearranging sentences but it just didnt sound good and it was ven nessacary as to make the poem rhyme either

but really you rhymed perfectly, and you worded most of the poem very well. so great job definatly giving this a 5/5

I love your work. Well done, yet again. :) 5/5

Saiya

Wow... im truly a fan of you now. This is incredible. Ive never seen anyone deliver these feelings in such a real and emotional way, all at once displaying such sad and beautiful imagery. Your words touch my heart for i have felt such sorrow. But one thing you must always remember is to keep your head up because "the pain now, is part of the happiness then" or vice versa depending on ur situation. Things will always go wrong in our lives, otherwise we wouldnt be human. We must however, find a way to pick ourselves up because there must be a brighter tomorrow. It could strike you in the middle of nowhere as long as you remain optimistic. The important part is to see the beauty in every little thing in order to find meaning to the greater picture. Again, great poem. Take care,

Ana*