I don't really think there is anything missing at all, i think your very good. the only part that was a little rough to read through was the 3rd stanza i think just adding simple words to some of the sentences to even out the syllables would fix it though...but other then definatly a 5/5 poem you used great vocab and always rhymed well really good job

Each day it gets harder just to wake
And these feelings i cannot shake
I think you should reword these, they seem to weaken the rest of the poem.
Also, you use the word 'whom' too often. Try finding alternet words.

Though I don't believe it not at all
Its all i have, though its small
It'll get better, if my time I bide
This forlorn hope that resides inside

hmm, this part needs a little work.
Try placing a comma before 'not at all' and after 'bide'.
when you write, 'Its all i have, though its small', I think it would flow better if you wrote something like, 'It's all I have, though it's rather small'.
not bad altogether, it made good sense and was entertaning, 4/5

Beautiful & touched me deep
very well written
i cant understand why ppl undervote poems like these... it should be 5 not 4.7
well

Each day it gets harder just to wake
And these feelings i cannot shake
I find it hard to draw a breath
As inside i wish for death

is beautiful !
loved reading this
love
amy

Pretty good, you can improve by using "I" less. Here's my version

I sit and wonder, sit and think
And into depression i further sink
don't know anything, nothing at all
Not even how to avert my own fall

cannot help those for whom i care
no one whom feelings i can share
Life seems pointless, dull and drab
As each chance slips by, I vainly grab

Each day it gets harder just to wake
And these feelings i cannot shake
finding it harder to draw a breath
As inside i wish for death

Though I don't believe it not at all
Its all i have, though its small
It'll get better, if my time I bide
This forlorn hope that resides inside

Beautiful again! This is very easy to read as the rhymes seem to come naturally to you which is a talent. I love your work.

Again, spectacular, emotional poem. Again, the flow is beautiful and the rhythm is great.
Keep it up!

Saiya