Wow... That scared me. Lol. Yeah, I know I'm a baby. Lol. It was really intense and I liked it. I could feel the emotion and it was amazing! My favorite stanza was:

"and now out to the cellar
They can decide their own fate
Stay and die, or run and get caught
either choice they're going to hate."

I liked the rhyme scheme you had, except when you rhymed "scene" with "been", but otherwise, I loved it! Good job!
~BJ~

I loved this, i've never really read a horror poem before i have one but your is 100 times cooler this is so cool!!! i didnt get the first stanza, last line...come in and under?? why would you go under a house? but other then that you wrote this perfect the ending concluded it soo well great vocab great flow and rhyming 5/5

Im scared to go to bed now, im thinking of the movie the house of 1000 corps, creepy awsome write tho

I love that movie! But They were more creepy people. and it wasnt 4 teens and it wasnt a dare lol. nor where they taken to a cellar and i could go on, just becuz thats how much i liek that movie lol.

Hmm, intense. Well-written, yet again I don't like the subject heh. 5/5 Because it is an excellent write; well written and a good flow

(btw; I am the Forever Saiya person.. Just different name)

This poem is really really sad. wow...u r one of those poets that give their everything in a poem...5/5

Kind of gross..very dark, very black and quite well written. More than that, gross.

Good Writing!
beth

That is scary! Overall this is another excellent poem except this stanza doesn't quite fit in with the flow of the rest.
'and now out to the cellar
They can decide their own fate
Stay and die, or run and get caught
either choice they're going to hate.'

This poem is very...different. I heart it!

Remind me never to step inside your lovely sinful home. =)

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

That's dark,
good to know it's not true
awesome job though..

Hey, that was so creepy.. i got goosebumps readin this thing.. very powerful word, and u even managed the rhyme.. gr8 job
take care
Nannoush

Love this poem :-)

keep it up.

Absolutely marvelous. wow..u have some gr8 talent. that was kinda creepy, but it was gr8! 5/5!
~*Who Cares?*~

Excellent poem...it kinda reminds me of a song by Rob Zombie...

Oooh Sweet=D that was cool! I WEALLY LUVED IT! lol. Good job! Hmmm... Advise... More commas and periods lol (I tell everyone that=D) it was SweEEeEeT!!!

Ok wow thats really scared me lol.. i am glad to hear it's not true keep up the good work 5.5

This is really weird because for some reason, i liked it!!!! lol! It was really good. It seems like one of those horror movies. Good job. 5/5

Wow, so intense!!!! i've never read a scary poem before!!! wow, i loved it. keep up the fantastic job!
**lisa**

Ohh...spooky, like a horror movie. nice job

Great job on this! You are very talented.. your poems just seem to have such a perfect flow & feeling. Great job! dont ever quit writing! 5/5*