I loved this one!!
you had such strong imagry, it was utterly beautiful even though it was dark. great job
5/5

Aw!!! this poem is really depressing! now i feel like i want to die and just get it over with!

Wonderful i like the last line very great keep on writing girl i know u are a good writer i think

Alrighty I love all your poems, like the others this is amazing. I keep wondering to myself how you get such a perfect rhyme and flow.... 5/5 I'm adding you to my favorites.

Again, interesting. Different, but still, for some reason, I think there is something missing in your dark poems. I just can't figure it out. Sorry, I still think it's a good poem, just not dark enough for my liking.

Wow.. To be honest, I can't find anything that needs to be corrected or that I didn't like. This poem kinda blew me away. I'm amazed and impressed. You used pretty good vocab, and I loved that alot. Keep it up.

Natalie``

Stolen identity
No longer myself
Twisted serenity
Rest in peace, in health

^ Great opening! This is an excellent poem! Loved the words you used throughout it! Its very dark. Keep up the great writing! xx

This one seemed more of a sad poem too. I would've put it in the sad poems, but it's every person's opinion as to where you put it for emotional differences.

[Dark granite
Heavy stone
Pressing into the dirt
Sealing my final home]
^^My favourite stanza. I liked the way you were with the words and the way you described each was brilliant. It made me remember what it was like when my close friend's dad died. =( Well done. 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

The last stanza

-A crack in the earth
Where I will awaken
Question my worth
Allow myself to be taken-

was breathtakingly sad. you have so much talent, your poetry is awesome
xxxxx

Wow, very dark and depressing. Great flow and wording though. I can actually picture this whole poem in my head, creepy. 5/5 Great job!

Innoc3ntStar

I am not sure if this poem is about you, or about someone else, but either way, I really feel this poem. I have lost someone extremely close to me. I also have felt this way at times. You capture a wonderful, melancholy mood here, and the sorrow resonates off the page! I love it!!

I liked this it's not one of my favorites like the top few which means your improving so good job!

Stolen identity
No longer myself
Twisted serenity
Rest in peace, in health

Wonderful opening.

A crack in the earth
Where I will awaken
Question my worth
Allow myself to be taken

powerful ending

Again you have done one heck of a job. the imagery was wonderfully vivid and the emtion was powerful. This is the best poem of your I have read. I really like it more than all the others, I was just astonished, by your talent. 5/5

Beautiful! This one made me think, deep. As do all your poems, but this one, deeper then the others. I loved the lines

Grass trodden
Flowers bent
Cheeks sodden
Uncommon consent

It was smooth and well worded, and all in all, beautifully written

5/5