Lol i liked...i hate it when all it is is a dream dont you?...then again sometimes the dreams are the best.

~Kay~

Wow that was really good. And the ending that made me laugh. LoL Keep it up

Nice work.......you are a visionary.... a dreamer .....at that.... good poetic skills.. nice story teller....

Haha loved the end! I was totally into it!

You must be really horny lately.Anyways,i don't think they're lacking just a bit simpler. Your still my favorite though.

Words that forever linger
in the dark black ink
quietly they whisper
to the author as he thinks

Hope i helped.

Love Alays
CORIE

Haha so funny.. another 5/5 xx

Lol...I love the ending great poem 5/5

Hehe, nice twist at the end.
5/5
*Gem*

Shit it had to be a dream but some dreams are the best LOL
-Jamie

This one works for me too!!!! Dang I wish I had a man like you.

Haha didn't expect that but okay lol. My favorite part is the end when you said $#!T it was just a dream lol. Great flow awesome poem.
-vino

Well what could anyone add to what has already been said above. I think this is a very good write. It sure does make the mind wonder..

Wow good work

Haha, oh my, the ending was unexpected! It was very detailed and as a thing of personal preference, I'd like some things hidden, haha. Very bold of you to write this way, and its commendable. You are not restricted and you have your way, I think that's important for any writer.