Anyway.. I don't really like this poem. Not enough raw emotion. This seems really forced and it doesn't really seem like a poem. It sounds like you're trying to just tell people how bad you think you have it. Don't misunderstand me, I'm not saying you're lying or that you've never felt this way.. I'm just saying that you are seeming to try to hard. I'll read your other poems as well.. More emotion next time please, and don't try so hard.