I feel the flow of this poem could have been more rythmatic. But thats not important. I feel this is a very good piece. Some wordings could be more thought out. but over all ... it was good.

This kinda sounds like my poem 'underneath' O_o
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Underneath her clothes and skin.
Hidden within her words and eyes,
is a place thats so cold, and so ugly.
And shes scared as hell.
Scared at the thought of feeling.
Wide awake, and keeping distance,
Nothing seems to penetrate her.
Shes scared as hell.
I'm frightened too.
wide awake, and keeping distance from my soul.
I am scared like her.
Not feeling whole.

Yeaa i agree....it coulda been better
LISSA

WoW i found a poem i didnt vote and comment yet....Nice job..well written..but the caps is just wierd...
5/5 ttyl sometime
PeAcE
~The Poet~

Hmm.this Poem Make me want to think whicih is rare in my case. Are you talking about Sexual Abuse of some sort?? Or is it just depression??