Hey its a good poem! Not the best one iv ever read! But please dont take it the wrong way or anything! Its was still good! But the only thing i dont like about it is, is how you set it out!
Like how you said
Cause you is the one i always want!
(or something like that!)
I dont like it how you added "Is the one"! my opinion is that it would sound better if that sentence was written like this!
Cause you are the one that i always want!
Sorry if i sond mean! Its just my opinion! Abd i know everyone's different!
lov Paige!
Please look at some of my poems!
thanx xoxoxoxo

Don't want to sound mean... but I agree as well... you have a lot of talent... your poem would be wonderful if you just watch your gramer... you can't always write how you talk... you feel me? sometimes what might sound right doesn't "read right"... keep trying sweetie