That's quite a cute little twist at the end

by cute i mean the whole little girl part

i think the title suits this one well

good job =]

Weird in its darkness, but the poetic part was pretty good, though I think that the color scralet is with one T, and the name is spelt scarlett...
Oh, never mind.
Great as it is.

Good Writing!
beth

Wow !! this is so deep & intense...loved reading it
5/5
love
amy

Again I really love the poem, but there r no Commas or periods, let me give u an example, this is the original

So then i stopped the staring
It hurt me just to see
That the little girl in scarlett
Lived in a world like me

With Commas and Periods

So then I stopped the staring,
It hurt me just to see,
That the little girl in scarlet,
Lived in a world like me.

It makes the reader pause to make words more dramatic, and it helps when u have a fast reader, who doesn’t like to pause unless told to.
Anyways very good poem! great job!

Cheers thanks for your advice
x

Omg emy this one is soo so good it is unreal! how do u do this girlie!! just wow... lol that is it ... wow

This is awesome. One of my favorite poems ever. It's so sad and dark, it's just beautiful.

I don't know quite how you intended it to go, but it seemed like a poem about a love triangle (?) or something like that where the one person who she cares about is oblivious to her situation, while she doesn't notice the person who really cares about her?

Or maybe the narrator likes to gossip about her (the whole thing about staring?) and finally realizes how hard things really were for her?

I don't know. I would love to see exactly the situation you were talking about when you wrote this???

Anyways, amazing work. Please write more soon ;)

~Scarlett