I hate giving constructive criticism because it makes me feel mean. (lol)

You've got a good start here, If you keep working on certain areas i think you'll make this quite a solid piece..

Anyways i like the title, it's bold. (Very Eye Catching)

Enjoyed reading this.. keep e'm coming :)

It seems very familir... or im losing my mind... so yeh.but i like it ...i dunno what to say im outta comments too many no time to recover *falls over*

Love youuuuu
Jenn

You were "fighting" to keep it alive, because you are THE FIGHTER! It wasn't bad, no, but not your best either. I enjoyed reading it, nonetheless. Good job!

Car

Hey it werent all that bad it was really quite gd! and like pure silence i am all outta comments sorri xox

Hun, I will still be around on the site and I will always be here for you when ever you need me, just shut or PM alright and honestly I expect atleast one!

lol Love you always
Jenn