Everlasting

by Marianne   Nov 8, 2005


You took my hand and led me across the dance floor
you kissed me and we both know we wanted more

we both know this love is meant to be
we know it cant you see?

he said it was love at first sight
but for me it was fright

i was scared to let him in my heart
because of what some other guy said from the start

he was patent for me and soon after i knew he cared
as for me no longer scared

this love we share is forever is what i know
i should have known from the start but why didn't i know and why was i so low?

it doesn't matter much anymore
what more could i ask for?

^*^I LOVE YOU, MY LOVE!!!^*^

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  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Um, jagged.....I meant like, well, the sentences need to be more even so it flows well, not so many words in one and not in the other, the same beat for each sentence.....does that make sense?

  • 18 years ago

    by kiesha

    I really liked this. It was very sweet and heartfelt. I know how you felt when you said you were scared to let him into your heart. I'm having that problem right now. But yeah, I thought your poem was good. Keep writing and take care.
    > Kiesha

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    I thought the poem was very cute and sweet and meaningful......I didn't think it flowed well tho....make your sentences more even, not so jagged, and you'll have a masterpiece! great joob

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