I loved the fast paced rhyth to it. it made it stand out in my head more. and i very much agree with what you are saying in it.

Very good ideas and i like the rhythem...very smooth!

Interesting poem...you did well forming the paragraphs...i enjoyed the read
luv em

Amazing poem, hun! I really like the way you wrote this, and I agree with it 100%. Great job!!

You are an amazing poet, all of your poems have so many different emotions tied to them. And thanks for the comments on my poems.

This poem soke nothing but Truth and I love it good job AGAIN 5/5

Awsum peom just froze my brain lol
a deserved 5/5
keep it up :)

~StefQ

AWWW! I know how you feel! lol! This poem left me longing more! lol! :D
Kris

Wow Ruthie for a first poem this is really good..*two thumbs up*...Jocy

I just reread this and it was even better than it was the first time around really really good job