Wow, excellent poem... very different. I haven't read one poem since Shakespear that uses "thy or thou" and I like it a lot... it's beautiful! nice job.

That was pretty good, I really liked it! try using more commas and periods so the reader knows when a setance is over. I do for some odd reason like this line
"I must admire thy will to live
But it only awakens my urge to kill
For the revenge, for the thrill"
Anyways good job!

Sweet. This is definitely dark and it truly speaks well. The repetitions of the stanzas enhance the emotions spreading through these lines. Though I'm not very sure of the old-english-style you have here, but it seems appropriate to me. I've enjoyed it. Every single word. Nice write. =)

Great poem, it dark and emotional.

migth want to fix the Iâ??m things though

WOW! Amazing poem. Very sad and dark but full of emotion and flow. Keep up the great work!

~*Much Love.....Haily

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