Comments : Revenged

  • 18 years ago

    by little birdy

    Wow, excellent poem... very different. I haven't read one poem since Shakespear that uses "thy or thou" and I like it a lot... it's beautiful! nice job.

  • 18 years ago

    by Megadrive

    That was pretty good, I really liked it! try using more commas and periods so the reader knows when a setance is over. I do for some odd reason like this line
    "I must admire thy will to live
    But it only awakens my urge to kill
    For the revenge, for the thrill"
    Anyways good job!

  • 18 years ago

    by Dreams

    Sweet. This is definitely dark and it truly speaks well. The repetitions of the stanzas enhance the emotions spreading through these lines. Though I'm not very sure of the old-english-style you have here, but it seems appropriate to me. I've enjoyed it. Every single word. Nice write. =)

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Great poem, it dark and emotional.

    migth want to fix the Iâ??m things though

  • 18 years ago

    by themeuneverseen

    WOW! Amazing poem. Very sad and dark but full of emotion and flow. Keep up the great work!

    ~*Much Love.....Haily

  • 18 years ago

    by Princess09

    Iâ??m