This is a good poem i just think u need to put more emotion into it
tell it the way it is not what u think other like!!
email me some time
ashley44putter@aim.com

love ya tons!

This is a good poem i just think u need to put more emotion into it
tell it the way it is not what u think other like!!
email me some time
ashley44putter@aim.com

love ya tons!

Oh thats so cute...
just one thing that bugged me... ment...meant:P
great work tho..
take care of urself k!?
xoxoxox

That is a great poem. Nice flow, and emotion. One question though, do you believe in God.. or did you just put that in there because he is the known one to do such a thing? Either way, it doesnt effect the poems natural beauty. You have some talent on your shoulders. You just need to believe in yourself a little more.

By the way, thank you for your comment. And yes, I am young.. but I do like to express myself in such a way. What did you mean by the last part.. And if I am reading correctly, then I am glad to be of service. :)

Keep in touch Dear Friend.

-Jennifer.

Great poem. I love this type of poem. Excellent and interesting to read. :)

Aw thts a nice poem. i really liked it! gd writing, jesx

Fun fun...

A great poem mate..its good..keep it up!
xxx :)

Aww!

Aww!... aww.. what...?

Thanks, i like your poem it has a subtle rhyme that seems like it doesnt need to be there but is worked in with a very crafted style.

The poem is very nice yet is it also unclear in the beginning you say "us" yet in ht end you say "you two" so who exactly are you taking about you and someone or someone and someone else. The only thing I can think tis that you are still quoting God and if that is the case it should still be in "quotes"

Much Luv-VICKIE-

Hey David,
I loved the first line. It brought a smile on my face:)
take care,
marjan