Wow.....what a great poem ....
i did miss reading your stuff
i was waiting for a new one to come along...and what a well paid wait
keep it up and i hope you feel better
take care
love kirsty xxx

Vey good, i like the metaphore, good job!

I liked this a lot cause i can imagine someone sitting in the middle of a highway when it's raining and just fuking their head up, i didnt like how you ended it because i though the whole highway/pavement idea was cool and then you like switched settings to a wall so i didnt think it fit in with the rest of the poem but overall this was way good 5/5

I like this poem hun good job:)
thanks for the comment..it was one of those poems that just rang off 'my tongue' i guess you could say...just kinda came out.
Take care xoxo
And keep writing from what i've seen you have great talent xoxo

I love it! writting metaphorically. *smiles* if it is about you, do not think this world is all hatred. i thought that too until i looked deeper and saw the inner beauty and i'm only 16. 5** Rosie xXx

INCERDIBLE! I LOVE IT SO MUCH! I WILL COMMENT MORE ON IT LATER... SCHOOLS ALMOST OUT! PEACE OUT.... ! 5/5/!]

~stevie~
~yellowfeverlime~

Wow that was really great! i love your writing... : ) also thnk you for your sweet comments!

Great poem, love the metaphors.

Awesome poem.

This time I could really feel it.

The imagery was so..vivid. I could see it all happen, and it all eruptured at that one point, "Bashing mother earth with my fists"

That's when it all happened, everything just formed.

The poem read itself, it was amazing.

I just really don't know what to say other than great job, keep up the good work, and welcome to my favorites.

I think this is one of the best poems you've written. It all flowed together so well. You're really good 5/5

~ Tina