Amazing.
Excellent.
Bravo!
I reallly like this.
I could imagine it all in my head.
Your an amazing writer.

Great poem, super imagery. you told it very well.

I like it good poem

Wow! I kinda drew a parallell to "a christmas story"... You know the one where Mr scrooge is visited by his old collegues ghost who's wearing a chain of the size of all the bad stuff he's done... !!! hehe well ! Very well written! Nice job!

That was really good. Over all, I loved it. It was uniquely written with a good rhtyhm and even imagery, I loved the images of flame that entered my mind. Great job there! The only complaint I have, is one that you don't even have to worry bout, I'm only nit-picking. These lines used the same word to rhyme and flow. and the middle line was much to long to keep up with the great flow you had before:

that you gave out during your time,
and nothing can save you when the flame starts to burn,
cause you fed the flame over time.

(note: the flow just means u want to make the middle line shorter, with less syllables so that we can rhyme it in a one breathed flow...sort of, lol I hope you get what I mean, if not I'm always here to answer questions. Feel free to disregard everything, as I am no expert, I just thought I'd share my thoughts. Great write though! I hope to see alot more from you over time :) )