WOW!!!!!!!!!!!
Mona thats amazing one of your best yet i think.....its so original yet i feel like ive read it time and time before...
I feel every word in it and the rhythm flowed through me
I loved it I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
keep it up and write more pleeeease i cant wait
Take care love you looooooooadsssssss
love ya sweetums kirsty xxxxx

Aww very good hunn! -xxx-

It's diferent, and in my mind, different makes everything perfect. it's an amazing idea, written by an amazing writer. remarkable work.

-Suzie

Excellent, absolutely excellent. the title was, well, perfect. this poem filled with passion, depth, power, emotion, creativity and intelligence. the words you chose expressed these things wonderfully. well done. This poem also had an amazing story, truly impressive. my favorite stanza was the second one, closely followed by the opening stanza.

Brad

Really awesome yet immensly sad. I loved it all, every word. It kept me wanting more! Maybe a sequel would be cool...? Not forcing, but mull it over maybe. Anyways, fantastic, and your icon pretty much rocks.

Matt

Hey! wOw that was really good! i like it alot... idk if this was from an experiance or from your imagination but either way i thot it was awesome keep up the good work and thanx for commenting on mine, your realy inspire me! ~|-(*)ByeZ(*)-|~

Good job girl!

Oh honey...you did an amazing job with this. i absolutely love it! and I love you! You write beautiful poems!

Yes, I was hoping that line would throw you off..It's just how I am..Haha. What you though it meant in the beginning is probably what it meant.

Anyways, this poem is great, I liked it all, except I think guttered and stuttered, is kind of a weak rhyme..That's just me though.

And also, at the very beginning I think the flow is a little bit off because waters,crackers, and cigarretes, if you say it aloud, it takes much longer to say than, thats all she gets.

Great poem, keep up the good work, I love all your poetry.