Whao sound like the shooting is south california I LUVE THIS POEM

You've done very well with this poem, alot of discription...i really liked this part
*Im to weak
they push the door in
they get their guns out
and yell to the crowd..
"To all who think they
are perfect have a great
life in hell"

well done.........luv em

Thats insane. its so sad tho. but i really like it

Wow hun that really is a good poem...glad u asked me to read it...thanx for the comment n keep it up...

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Pretty cool poem i probably have this wrong but i liked how the rhythm was quite chaotic which mirrored the chaos of the context. great subject for a poem good job!
aaron

The poem feel so real.its a 100 to me. keep it up.

Really awesome poem...I like it lots, thanks for sharing and keep it up. 5/5

The poem feel so real.its a 100 to me. keep it up.

Hey this is really good..! 5/5

I liked it, nice poem keep it up

Wow, thgats really amazing, but scary hehe but really sad... 5/5

Oh my Juls. I have never read anything on this before but, the fear and ...just wow, well done in that situation i dunno what i would do, thankyou for sharing this well done

Jenn

JULS..... As I was readin it, it broght tears in my eyes.... It was VERY,VERY good!!! 5/5

Awsome job. just as Kim was saying...It brought tears to my eyes..
Keep up the good work.

Love ya,
~Joe~

Sorry for leaving so many comments... Wow, that was awesome... I love your poems... they're beautiful...

EXCELLENT... KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.

This is good, i like it. good job!

BX Girl***

Very very sad. I really think that everything attracks to a mind. Like horriable things because it's nasty and it's all you think about. I mean i'm not saying your a killer or anything i'm saying that a shotting from a school you here gets to you and all of a sudden you write about it. And how one thing can lead to another. Like when you said you believe in god and he'll help you get threw this and then the boy shot the gun. You did an amazing job. very scary thing. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

Wow this was a diffrent poem! It was really very good! I like it!