Unfinised or not, what you have so far is excellent.

Be strong,
for the pain will end,
and you shall rise above

^love this part. terrific write. keep up the good work.

Like you said, you could should add more...its just hard to find out what is missing... I don't know.!thanks for the comment on To The Cutters... it seems to be one that everyone praises... thanks again

Kayla
XOXO

Well actually i thought that this piece sounds very finished. it has very stable rhythm and rhyme, all in all a very good peice of writing!

It doesn't sound unfinished. Well, not to me, anyway. I think it's wonderful. I'll read this everytime I feel like I'm about to explode.

Another good poem. I wanted to read your love poem. But I can't from work.

Great poem I liked it a lot. flow and rhyme is constant.
~~Sweetie

Awww...that was nice of you to write a poem to your friend...

great poem! wonderful! 5/5! :o)

michelle

Uniquely written, but really good message!!!!