Its diferent. . The only constructive critisism i can give is ... capitalise your " i " 's...... still 5/5
~David

I love it! awesome be proud I lurve the words you use, great poem becky :)

sammi xxx

I love this poem too. the words u use capture me immediately.
love ya
tara xxxx

A very deep poem...sad too.keep it up!:)
xxx

I love it too!! its brilliant, fantastic writing! 5/5.
lots of luv,
xxEmmaxx

Yo i tottaly love this poem too and i love the wordz that u be using in your poems that makes tha reader interested...5.5 and keep up the great job

I like this poem a lot because it seems as though the poem is litterally "falling" if you know what i mean.

Wow becky this poem is really good!

That's really good. 5/5

I really like this poem. i like the idea of it. a real true fall.
Keep it up.
Emma 5/5

Another good write and the layout made for easy reading.

Keep writing
Nici

I can totally see why you feel this poem is finished, cause you had a full course menu! LOL! Sorry that was kinda cheesy. This is really well written. I LOVE the ending! :)

I agree this is a great poem, I think that your very talented, and we share alot of the same feelings, im gonna ask you to be a freidn on myspace
xoxo
~*~sabrina~*~

Once again good poem 5/5