The message was pretty good, pretty unique style, I still use four line stanza's, I liked the first line of the fourth stanza the most, the subject was unique, I never read something about actually coming back. Good job.

Aww... this is really sad and you did a great job on this. It really touched my heart. You described everything in such a beautiful way and I absolutely loved the third stanza. It really stuck out to me. It was just overall a very beautiful poem. You did a great job on this!

Aw this is so sad.. its hard to move on and leave the one you love its especially hard to see them with someone else.. nice job

I really like this poem, especially the second stanza. Towards the end, however, I start to get confused; are you still talking about love or not leaving town? Maybe I'm just reading it wrong, but either way I loved it. Great Job =)

Very nice...
This is quite uniquely written. Surprisingly enough, the repitition was done very well. I usually loathe repitition, but you worked this piece very well.
I love the second stanza, where your describing time peeling away to show fresh green...truly outstanding.
Take care and keep it up~Holly

This was a unique and different approach to writing, still I was fascinated by the content...There were better from you, but this one was well written like the rest. Keep it up!!