I think this is ment to be a poem,
the words are you own so why not put them in the structure you like

thank you for commenting on my poem Swallowing the hurt
it is based on real events in my life just changed and fictionalized some if you want to read my story its titled Broken and i wrote a poem with the title

thank you for your critique and i look forward to reading more of your poems

Nice poem lewy do sum of mine some ***** rated all my poems 1 GRRRRR i hate it i need to repost them all!

Wonderful

Nice work, it was well thought out and congratues its very good.

love always,
jenny

Hey dis was reli gwd luved it..keep it up
bye luv dia