I really like this poem because it's straight to the point but also original and creative at the same time. You've definitely got talent hun, so keep up the great writing, and I hope that you're okay.

I enjoyed reading this.
I thought the flow was off in a couple lines, but apart from that you did a great job, and the last line hit me hard, it has huge impact.

I like it u did a really good job on this one sis love ya