Wow. No votes and no comments, I'm really not sure why. This is a really well written poem and I'm glad I got the chance to read it. I have no complaints of it at all, keep it as is and keep writing!

A beautiful piece. I agree with steph, this is a great poem, and people should read. Well, I'm not here for votes, I'm on this site to learn, and to pick up any advice I can get to help me write better poetry. Keep writing my friend, people will notice you soon.