Awesome.
even though i get lost, it still rocks.
ur really good at showing ur feelings.
later.

I think you meant swamp instead of swump...I dont like that line a soup you are bound to ate its forced rhyme I get what you wanna say but ate doesnt fit. Also but as clear as the morning or a morning you need to pick. The last line I think the comma should be before and to break it up better. Overall I liked the meaning of the poem I would just make those changes to read better. Good job 4/5

Once again, watch the rhyme scheme. This poem was a bit choppy, but working on the rhyme scheme will help that also.

Great poem. 5/5! wonderful work! keep it up! :o)

hugs,

michelle

I liked that poem alot, nice work. 5/5

take care

Great job! this is amazing, ur a terrific writer