W0w. that was really g0od. very well written. amazing j0b. keep it up

l0tz 0z l0ve / d0ra
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Damn, you're so good! Darien, this poem was awesome... I'm speechless! hehehe ^_^ Very sweet, yet sad... great on emy friend.

Wow i agree this poem is really awesome. i must say keep up the good job!! i love your poetry, it hits close to what i have been through. your really gifted Darien.

Brilliant poem. full of feeling and well written. however, i do think that the last line let it down slightly, not sure why, but think it could be improved

Wow, that rocked! Excellent writing!

This is ultimate. this poem is actually incredible. great flow, style and language. fantastic wordplay and vivid imagery. dark, yet relatable, well crafted concept. i particularly liked the lines:

"...The crimson moon so bright,
as the stars dance like fireflies..."
.....
"...I hear an eerie sound,
as it bleeds through my ear...."
.....
"...I want this floor painted red,
with blood the body's lotion..."
.....
"...The morning when I awake,
I breathe this sweet decay.
my lovers life I did take,
Her body left to rot away...."

these lines hold such vivid imagery in them and such power of emotion, its ultimate. you have such a gift, keep doing what you're doing... -hannah

Great write Bill!! A superb poem... Great theme :)

Darien rather - I should try reading what I'm writing before submitting LOL! Sorry my friend!

Wow, this poem was brilliant. It has such great imagery in it. you did an amazing job once again.

Rock on, I love this! The imagery is flawless and the conviction of your choice of words.....just wow!
Take care~Holly

Wow this was amazing... reading it just gave me chills and i dont know it just made me feel cold... but thats a good thing because it shows how well you affect your readers... you always amaze me with your poems... keep it up

sammie

COOL POEM!!! Awesome imagry, particularly in the part with "I want this floor painted red,
with blood the body's lotion.
In my mind I see you dead,
and I cannot control this emotion."

Liked this poem alot man! ^_^

~Anthony

This is good for sure, the title reminds me of that band of the same name.

"under these sinister skies"...liking it

Deep, dark and powerful... (you got all the words in on this one) love it.

I'm surprised that your only rated a 4.8 for this poem, this is definately a five. And that's what you got from me.

-Taylor

This is great so much pain and hurt so much feeling great work :)
xoxo robyn

Wow youre so dark and mysterious. How do you do it? ;)

Beautiful and dark, sinister, I love it! Wow! I must say this is one of your best, way to go!!!!

Wow
that was a really good poem
everything about it was amazing

O.............M...................G!!
i luv it