I really liked this poem. Even though I haven't lost my mother or father, I still feel the same way with losing my best friend.

I know exactly how it feels when a mother or fathers life seems to be slipping through my hands...

While reading I could see a picture of a little girl saying those words going through my mind. Gave me little shivers. Nice job.

Very touching. its almost as if images come in your head of the scene .. it reminds me of "a little princess" i think thats the name of the movie .. with princess sarah .. shes like 10 and her father leaves for war.. she used to live in india.. i don't know why im rambling about a movie.. but good job!

I liked this poem alot!!! really really awesome job! 5/5 from me

Very nicely written, u put feeling into the words so u could see it all happening right infront of u. great job!!

This is better ^^

Yes it makes sense. though it sounds like mom and dad don't want to let go. That was not my problem. I had five brothers and no Dad in sight. My mom was glad to get rid of us...lol Thanks I liked this too.