Really powerful poem, it's so good. the last line is just amazing.

I've never actually read a poem before like this, the structure is very new to me.

It sounds like one of those rhymes kids would chant ,like...

"Stick and stones may break my bones..."

Argh, what I'm trying to say is, it's good.

There.

~Atomic

Pretty good.
I like the rhythm of the poem, but not the rhyming pattern, it seems kinda vague...
Anyways, overall the poem is great.

I really liked your poem. My favorite stanzas are

Taste your own blood,
Taste your own fate,
Swallow your damn pride,
With your damn hate.

Your last breath,
Your last stand,
Last of all,
Your last command.

Really the flow of this poem was great and I have to say this poem will be stuck in my head all day.

Wow you put so many different rhyming ways into one poem! I never saw somthing like this before! Very nice job!

I love the attitude in you poem, i can't choose just one stanza that catches my eye, cause each stanza just made me want to read more! thanks again.
luv em

Really good peice. very well written.

the satnzas like:

Live for your suffer,
Live for my revenge,
Know that your life,
Now comes to an end

have a really strong rhymth to them which is different to the other stanzas, this change in pace thoughout really keeps the readers attension on the poem and adds a lot of interest. overal a brilliant peice.

5/5

Awsome! I loved it. *5/5*

Very nice poem. It's very, commanding the way you write this. Every word just 'booms' out at me. It's very good. A neat style indeed.

That's a Really Good Poem.. That Flows Really Well.. And All The Rhymes Are Really Good.. well Done Keep It Up.. (Off To Read Part 2)

Dam.. I can't stop reading

Love this poem. So much hate in it. RAWR! I love how every part fits so perfect. Powerful last phrase. Love it.

Usually when I read a poem there is a part I like most. But in your poems, every part is breathe taking. Every phrase, every word.. And I have respect for that, cause not many can write like you do ..

Your so dam talented.. Love to read your work, it inspires me..

Well done well done,
Lotsaaa love -xxxx-

Wow ummmm searching fo a better word.............. wow damn this is good I love the imagry and the flow very captivating, great job.
Tim

Good job!!!!

Wo this is a very powerful poem you are an excellent writer!

Great Poem.
I liked how the flow changed, it was very unique. I mostly loved the speedy parts, haha those in my mind are when the stanzas are short and swift :P
I loved your word usage again and the poem was very powerful and dark.
I actually really enjoyed reading it, welldone.x

Yet again - you delviver an excellent piece of poetry, I will certainly take the time to read over your other poems :)

Peace. [Sole]

Truely an amazing piece of art!

How do u write such great pems i love it soo much